Robotic Pets and Dream Catcher Proofreading

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robotic pets my opinion

Robotic pets, like cats and dogs are now availlable. But I think they should be banned. If a robotic pet are bought for a yung child it could teech him or her that pets can be ignored or mistreated. whenever the childs mood changes. What would hapen if one day the child recieve a real pet He or she may treat it the same way.

Some robotic pets are used in nursing homes for eldely people who are unable to care for a real pet. I understand that this may give them some cumfort, but a robotic pet cant give you no love like a real animal can. I think nursing homes should has volunters who regularly brings in real pets for a few hours at a time insted.

The only positiv thing about robotic pets is that it might save some animals from being treated cruely by their owners. But the cost of robotic pets is still too high for most peoples budjets.

Corrected Text:

Robotic pets: My opinion

Robotic pets, like cats and dogs are now available. But I think they should be banned. If a robotic pet is bought for a young child, it could teach him or her that pets can be ignored or mistreated whenever the child’s mood changes. What would happen if one day the child receives a real pet? He or she may treat it the same way.

Some robotic pets are used in nursing homes for elderly people who are unable to care for a real pet. I understand that this may give them some comfort, but a robotic pet can’t give you love like a real animal can. I think nursing homes should have volunteers, who regularly bring in real pets for a few hours at a time instead.

The only positive thing about robotic pets is that it might save some animals from being treated cruelly by their owners. But the cost of the robotic pets is still way too high for most people’s budgets.

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Dream catcher

Long ago Iktomi, the teacher of wisdem appeared two a Lakota elder. iktomi had taken the form of a spider. The spider tok a wooden hoop that the elder was carrying it then will start to spin a web in it.

The spider maid the web a perfect circle with a hole in the middle. It told the elder that webs like this wood help the Lakota people will reach their goals and make better use of there ideas and dreams. The webs would cach their good ideas and dreams and let the bad ones go straight threw the hole. The elder will take the web to his people and told them what the spider had sed the lakota people then made their own “dreem catchers”.

Tooday many native americans hang dream catchers above their beds too capture good dreams and ideas.

Corrected Text:

Long ago Iktomi, the teacher of wisdom appeared to a Lakota elder. Iktomi had taken the form of a spider. The spider took a wooden hoop that the elder was carrying. It will then start to spin a web in it.

The spider made the web a perfect circle with a hole in the middle. It told the elder that webs like this would help the Lakota people reach their goals and make better use of their ideas and dreams. The webs would catch their good ideas and dreams and let the bad ones go straight through the hole. The elder will take the web to his people and tell them what the spider had said. The Lakota people then made their own “Dream catchers”.

Today many native Americans hang dream catchers above their beds to capture good dreams and ideas.

By:Kaydence